These are two shorter (but in my opinion much better) pieces I wrote during my stay in Jordan. Enjoy.
A crowd. A surge of people. A flood of souls unknown to each other. Amidst all these people, all feel alone. Each rushes to their own destination, their own dark corner in life. They all look ahead, as if there was nobody there but them. They are emotionless. Oblivious to the commotion outside of their empty bubbles. Those who do realise there are others around are shy, embarrassed somehow by a quickly disappearing chain that links us all together. And they pretend they cannot see.
But I feel desperate to reach out. To call out. To share something, anything, with someone. I long to have a connection, a bond with one person, outof all these people, just one. A nod would at the least be acceptable, a knowing glimpse would be more than I expected, a smile sheer ecstacy.
In this crowd I am alone. I scream for company, but no one listens.
Playlist: Music for Dancing Feet: Poptastica!
2 years ago
12 comments:
I love how you're compassionate in two different ways in these pieces. Love the first one more, though:)
you have a gift.. never stop writing.. you had me at "A flood of souls unknown to each other"..
And I agree with Ame's.. the first one had more.. "oomph" :)
these are really good..
i get a sense that they're two different chapters in a 'just waiting to be written' book..
separated by many other chapters..
nice reflections. You should go to new york you'll know what soul-less crowds r :)
u love writing
and it shows :*
amazingly talented especially "Then I open my eyes and I look out the window at the setting sun."
Amethyst: Thanks love.
Archer: Aww! Thank you. You're always one for encouraging others :) The first one too huh?
Jester: You're kinda right. I wrote these almost immediately after each other. They've sprouted out of the same chaos of feelings. Thanks a lot for your kind words.
Kaos: LOL. Trust me, you don't have to go that far...Thanks anyway.
Eshda3wa: Hehe. Thanks!
Oranjina: Aw! Thanks...That is a powerful line with much meaning, if I say so myself :P
aham shay i was gona paste the replies to my blog ri7t i pasted it here :P
i liked the first story, it reminded me of Have you ever by The offspring. I havent heard that song in ages !
Do0da: Funny...I don't know that song. I might check it out :)
Very descriptive... I felt like I was there!
a true writer ;) keep this up. beautiful choice of words
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